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Hello, as you requested, here is my review:) : He has told me is a “human” and that his people live on the other side of the stars... He told ...

Sorry to be late with this review, but here it goes: She stood on cold stone. Her gaze sought something in the distance. Her gaunt, honey-coloured fingers clasped the leash. ...

Since you have gotten quite a few grammatical reviews already, I guess I'll be brief and talk about the story itself: I feel that the first section needs to be ...

Nitpicks: The sun had already deserted the day and retreated amongst the clouds, leaving a few rays of pinkish light to stream through the gaps in the leafy ceiling, long ...

Alright! Sorry about the delay of the review but here it goes: The room was dark, a dim gray light shining down from the upper corner of the room. I ...

It was short! Way too short! But anyways: It was a word that was slowly beginning to feel like a straightforward definition of his life; as if it was consuming ...

Nitpicks first: First of all, break up your paragraphs! Those two walls of text would usually turn the reader away immediately. When I look in the mirror, I see a ...

Read-along comments: even though it he felt Take out 'it' from the first sentence. The only sound was coming from him. It was the gun in his hand, as he ...

Read-as-I-go comments: England docks. 2167 AD. 11:51 Pm I think you should reconsider some punctuations in this opening. And is the setting really called 'England docks'? Or is it a ...

Okay, nitpicks first: Doubtlessly there would be ways to keep himself occupied. There should be a comma after 'doubtlessly'. It's needle sharp point glistened in the artificial light. It should ...

Nitpicks first: Agian. It's 'again'. I have had the same vivid, reoccuring nightmare since I had turned sixteen, nine months ago. Not to be mean, but there are quite a ...

*Gasps* You posted! I owe you a critique so here we go: First of all, I need to critique the glossary (because I can): Ye-ye = grandfather. I presume it's ...

Bravo, it was quite a delightful read! "Israel must be wiped off the map" Very powerful quote, but shouldn't it end with some sort of punctuation? Someone up in heaven ...

Okay, nitpicks first: MOVIE STORE CASHIER: It’s a school night, isn’t it? It’s a little late to be checking out movies. He had directed the question to REUBEN, but REUBEN ...

It's nice with its elegant imageries, but I think it's a little too simple. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing, simple things are nice sometimes. Look at the lines on ...